Saturday, January 21, 2012

Radiance

We wind down slowly, inch by inch, toward the bottom of the sea. Headlights burst through the water revealing plants that dance to a tune only they know and fish wearing colors that only exist here. As we near the mouth of the algae covered cave it’s clear, by the presence of spear wielding guards, this will be no ordinary exploration. I look to Vince for answers, but he refuses to return the glance by looking straight ahead, seemingly enraptured by the vessel controls. After the swift docking, things happen so quickly I don’t realize at first that I’ve been betrayed, but when the restraints appear I’m sure I was right to slip the silver pistol in my ankle holster.
 
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Lillie

10 comments:

  1. Was not expecting that ominous ending...what happens? I'm intrigued Lillie!

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  2. I really need to know what happens! Super awesome Lillie!

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  3. Nice twist...definitely fodder for a full story!! Loved it!

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  4. Lov. Ing. This.

    Continue on with this story thread, yes please.

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  5. Always leave 'em hungry for more, yes? This pulls you right in, slaps you to attention and leaves you on the end of the plank! Like everyone else, I'd love more, more, more!

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  6. Ah, love a story that starts with a betrayal, the promise of action and adventure and possibly even intrigue! Nicely written.

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  7. Great story! Was not expecting the turn of events at the end and I'm very intrigued as to what happened!

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