Sunday, November 20, 2011

Lightning

He pulled the bill of his hat lower over his eyes, shook his head once, twice, then nodded. Rolling his shoulders slowly back, he adjusted his fingers. Two seam, it was his money ball. Sucking in a breath he stepped back, lifted his right leg, twisted at the waist, and let out a whoosh of air as he dropped his shoulder letting it fly. He grinned discretely when the bat swung catching nothing but air, can’t hit lighting.


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Lillie
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4 comments:

  1. EloiseNovember 21, 2011 at 6:03 AM

    I can soooo see that in my mind's eye (and I don't even follow baseball!)

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  2. StephanieNovember 21, 2011 at 2:49 PM

    Wow! Great job Lillie! I could picture this baseball game in my head!

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  3. ClaireNovember 21, 2011 at 3:12 PM

    That was great! I really liked the descriptions of pulling his hat down and rolling his shoulders. It was very vivid!

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  4. spring days, new growthNovember 26, 2011 at 12:06 AM

    I thought he was a golfer at first, that's because we don't see much baseball here in Australia! You have painted a super-clear picture of his movements and his slightly sheepish emotions as he misses the ball
    Excellent!
    Kate

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